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Re: Writting
« Reply #30 on: Oct 30th, 2002, 8:41pm »
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yeah the conjigations were pretty tough at times too. But since Spanish was my first language I was just think of the phrase or word in my head and see if it sounded right. And if I didn't know I would just ask my mom. But I like writting in Spanish it's fun. You get to use words in different ways and plus when you know spanish you can laugh at the funny things people say when there speaking Spanish.
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« Reply #31 on: Nov 1st, 2002, 6:30pm »
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ok since this is a writing post i figured id write some of the "stuff" ive done.. you can tell me if they are any good or not.... or stuff for revisions ..i wrote this one on july 1st 2002
"Together"
 
Once i knew you, we were so good together
There were times that i wished could last forever
They will always be with me, caught in my heart
You will be with me, forever, in my heart
 
Now whats going on? You're drifting away
You're leaving me behind, making me stay
Soon I'll be in the past, nowhere to be found
Soon I'll be gone, without a sound
 
I'll miss you so much when you eventually go
I'll be so alone with nowhere to go
but untill that time I'll treasure our time together
because you will be with me, in my heart.... forever
 
 
yeah that was for this kid i was like obsessed with, we are best friends, and he's not leaving anytime soon, well thats what he says, and i believe him...lol
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« Reply #32 on: Nov 6th, 2002, 3:47pm »
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obsession is a bad thing. thats just what I think
but that poem is good and I enjoyed
thank you.
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« Reply #33 on: Nov 6th, 2002, 3:54pm »
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thanks scott.. its an ok one..... ill put down some others, when i get the modivation to go upstairs and get my sketch book with them in it lol  Roll Eyes
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« Reply #34 on: Nov 6th, 2002, 8:50pm »
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Yeah I really liked your poem also! And I have to say that obsession is very bad I know that subject quite well, hehe. Anyway I think it's really cool that you guys are able to put poetry on the forum like that.
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« Reply #35 on: Nov 6th, 2002, 9:07pm »
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well the clock is growing late which means two things.  
I have no work tomorrow, and I want to write.
 
The summer nights  
the cool dark fights
all the people in street lights
random thoughts fly back and fourth  
I sit and wait and watch my earth
While the hairs sit in seats full of gerth(sp)
I want to know where I placed my dime  
for when the winter mornings shine
there will be nothing left for me on which to dine.
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if the sun refused to shine I'd still be loving you.
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« Reply #36 on: Nov 6th, 2002, 9:10pm »
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This is obviously not by me but I like it.
 
~ The Cold Within ~  
 
Six humans trapped by happenstance
in black and bitter cold,
each possessed a stick of wood,
or so the story's told.
 
Their dying fire in need of logs,
the first woman held hers back,
for on the faces around the fire
she noticed one was black.  
 
The next man looking 'cross the way
saw one not of his church,
and couldn't bring himself to give
the fire his stick of birch.
 
The third one sat in tattered clothes;  
he gave his coat a hitch.
Why should his log be put to use,
to warm the idle rich?  
 
The rich man just sat back and thought
of the wealth he had in store,
and how to keep what he had earned
from the lazy, shiftless poor.  
 
The black man's face bespoke revenge,
as the fire passed from his sight,
for all he saw in his stick of wood
was a chance to spite the white.  
 
And the last man of this forlorn group
did naught except for gain:
giving only to those who gave,
was how he played the game.  
 
The logs held tight in death's stilled hands,  
were proof of human sin.  
They didn't die from the cold without,
they died from the cold within.
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Re: Writting
« Reply #37 on: Nov 6th, 2002, 11:32pm »
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i am also gonna include a poem not written by me.. because the way this author writes captures me like a dream that you have not quite woken from yet....
 
but as a side note i dont actually believe in self mulitalation.. but the writing is really good.. so please dont form a warped perception of me.. thank you  Smiley
 
Cut-- by Sylvia Plath
 
What a thrill---
My thumb instead of an onion
The top quite gone  
Except for a sort of a hinge
 
Of skin,  
A flap like a hat,  
Dead white
Then that red plush.
 
Little pilgrim,  
The Indian's axed your scalp.  
Your turkey wattle
Carpet rolls.
 
Straight from the heart
I step on it,  
Clutching my bottle  
Of pink fizz.
 
A celebration, this is.  
Out of a gap
A million soldiers run,  
red coats, every one.
 
Whose side are they on?
O my  
Homuneulus, I am ill.
I have taken a pill to kill.
 
The thin  
Papery felling
Saboteur,
Kamikaze man---
 
the stain on your
Gaze Ku Klux Klan
darkens and tarnishes and when
 
The balled
Pulp of your heart
Confronts its smal
Mill of silence
 
How you jump---
Trepanned veteran,  
Dirty girl,  
Thumb stump.
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« Reply #38 on: Nov 7th, 2002, 2:54pm »
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lately i've been on such a creative streak, from like all these emotions... anyway i write this song yesterday, it all just came together, even the music which usually takes me a while.  Here's the lyrics (by the way you guys, all your stuff rocks!! keep posting it, i'll keep reading it) (and PS yes line 5 is a play off/ allusion to bohemian rhapsody...)
 
Hearts
 
So i guess that i should never say how i feel
Because once again i did, and look where it got me
Not exactly a lifetime in prison but still, you can't complain
Because you're the one who's dealing out all of the pain.
 
So you think that you can just leave me here to cry
Well that's not gonna happen cause you're not worth it
I'm not gonna hold on for dear life and beg fo ryou to return
Because i'm the one who's winning the hand this turn.
 
Deal me an ace, deal me a king
It doesn't mean i'll be missing anything.
Deal me a diamond, deal me a heart
I'm missing you less and less the more we're apart.
 
So i guess that i'm allowed to move on now
After all this waiting that didn't pay off
Waiting for you to see what to do--now i can think for mnyself
Because you're the one who made me Queen of Spades.
 
Deal me a jack, deal me a queen
Maybe someday you'll understand what it means
Deal me a club, deal me a spade
I'm turning my back more and more every day
 
Deal me an end, deal me a lie
Maybe you can stop and ask yourself why
You'd deal me your heart and keep mine up your sleeve
And hold it against me even after you leave.
 
So i guess taht i should never have wasted my time
On someone like you who plays with emotions
Back in the past, fun while it lasted, until i let you see
That playing a game of hearts is not for me.
(c) 2002 by Ashley Bowman
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Re: Writting
« Reply #39 on: Nov 7th, 2002, 6:15pm »
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scott~ i like the one you wrote
the one about cutting was well writen, i liked it
ash~wow that was totally awsome.. i loved it  Smiley
ok now heres another of mine
*side note* most of my poems are about the same person, hes been a big influence on the past year of my life, good and bad...
 
broken dreams
 
what are you doing?
how can you treat me like this?
you know how i feel about you
and you just turn away
 
we've spent so much time together
i thought my dreams would finally come true
then you threw it in my face
like you never even knew
 
now what am i sposed to do?
you have someone to love,  
but i'm just left in the dust
just like the old days that were true
 
i thought i had left all that behind
that maybe i found the one
the one that i could love,
and you'd feel the same way too
 
i guess its not ture oh well it looks like i'll have to move on
even though i don't want to
because im still in love with you
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« Reply #40 on: Nov 7th, 2002, 8:14pm »
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I saw someone today whom I haven't seen in a long time so alas inspiration struck me.
 
To wait for you is eternity  
longing for you is a fratirnity
your heart you say is for one
You betrayed your heart and so I'm done
Good luck to on your travels
as the story of life unravels
I thoroughly(sp)enjoy your company
until next we meet the days seem less sunny
 
its not much, but its there
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« Reply #41 on: Nov 8th, 2002, 7:34pm »
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dude you guys rock, we should make a JS fans anthology lol
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« Reply #42 on: Nov 8th, 2002, 9:19pm »
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Hehe, not a bad idea. I might even try to write a little something for it. It probably wouldn't be very good though.... hmmm....
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« Reply #43 on: Nov 8th, 2002, 9:26pm »
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Okay, in my English class we had to write a little thing like a tribute to something important in your family, like your name. I wrote this poem about my biological father, since he gave me my last name. Not great, but it helped me get some emotions out! (Oh yeah, I hardly ever rhyme in my poems... don't ask me, I just don't do it.)
 
Once I was ashamed
to write that name on a paper.
W... h... i... t...
something has to make it stop.
Disconnected,
disillusioned,
I don't even know my own name.
All it does is remind me
of the love you ever gave,
the time you never spent,
the memories you never made,
the life you left behind.
I see hope in that name now,
hope in my life
and how great it is
without you in it.
A name that was once so empty  
is full of broken hearts and unkept promises
and all of my insecurities.
Now I add my own promise,
to never live up to this name,
to make my own life
and to never be like you...
I'm going to stop hanging out
with all my hang ups.
A name is just a name,
what you do with it
makes it your own.
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« Reply #44 on: Nov 8th, 2002, 9:40pm »
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val you rock! that was awesome.
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