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Jupiter Sunrise Forum    Talk    Talk Amongst Yourselves    Writting « Previous topic | Next topic » Pages: 1 2 3 4 5  ...  48 Reply Notify of replies Send Topic Print    Author  Topic: Writting  (Read 6386 times) sillyfairy YaBB God/goddess     Gender: Posts: 532 Re: Writting « Reply #30 on: Oct 30th, 2002, 8:41pm » Quote Modify yeah the conjigations were pretty tough at times too. But since Spanish was my first language I was just think of the phrase or word in my head and see if it sounded right. And if I didn't know I would just ask my mom. But I like writting in Spanish it's fun. You get to use words in different ways and plus when you know spanish you can laugh at the funny things people say when there speaking Spanish. IP Logged NOXsucks30 YaBB God/goddess www.retroimg.co m   wicked awsome art     Gender: Posts: 4309 Re: Writting « Reply #31 on: Nov 1st, 2002, 6:30pm » Quote Modify ok since this is a writing post i figured id write some of the "stuff" ive done.. you can tell me if they are any good or not.... or stuff for revisions ..i wrote this one on july 1st 2002 "Together"   Once i knew you, we were so good together There were times that i wished could last forever They will always be with me, caught in my heart You will be with me, forever, in my heart   Now whats going on? You're drifting away You're leaving me behind, making me stay Soon I'll be in the past, nowhere to be found Soon I'll be gone, without a sound   I'll miss you so much when you eventually go I'll be so alone with nowhere to go but untill that time I'll treasure our time together because you will be with me, in my heart.... forever     yeah that was for this kid i was like obsessed with, we are best friends, and he's not leaving anytime soon, well thats what he says, and i believe him...lol IP Logged And what you've got means such a lot to me Someone to love, Somebody new. Someone to love, Someone like you. ~The Beatles wisensmart336 YaBB God/goddess "Do you know the muffin man?"     Gender: Posts: 746 Re: Writting « Reply #32 on: Nov 6th, 2002, 3:47pm » Quote Modify obsession is a bad thing. thats just what I think but that poem is good and I enjoyed thank you. IP Logged if the sun refused to shine I'd still be loving you. When mountains crumble to the sea there will still be you and me. one eyed jacks won I'd jax I'm makin' 1 eyed jaks. pbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbt. NOXsucks30 YaBB God/goddess www.retroimg.co m   wicked awsome art     Gender: Posts: 4309 Re: Writting « Reply #33 on: Nov 6th, 2002, 3:54pm » Quote Modify thanks scott.. its an ok one..... ill put down some others, when i get the modivation to go upstairs and get my sketch book with them in it lol   IP Logged And what you've got means such a lot to me Someone to love, Somebody new. Someone to love, Someone like you. ~The Beatles sillyfairy YaBB God/goddess     Gender: Posts: 532 Re: Writting « Reply #34 on: Nov 6th, 2002, 8:50pm » Quote Modify Yeah I really liked your poem also! And I have to say that obsession is very bad I know that subject quite well, hehe. Anyway I think it's really cool that you guys are able to put poetry on the forum like that. IP Logged wisensmart336 YaBB God/goddess "Do you know the muffin man?"     Gender: Posts: 746 Re: Writting « Reply #35 on: Nov 6th, 2002, 9:07pm » Quote Modify well the clock is growing late which means two things.   I have no work tomorrow, and I want to write.   The summer nights   the cool dark fights all the people in street lights random thoughts fly back and fourth   I sit and wait and watch my earth While the hairs sit in seats full of gerth(sp) I want to know where I placed my dime   for when the winter mornings shine there will be nothing left for me on which to dine. IP Logged if the sun refused to shine I'd still be loving you. When mountains crumble to the sea there will still be you and me. one eyed jacks won I'd jax I'm makin' 1 eyed jaks. pbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbt. wisensmart336 YaBB God/goddess "Do you know the muffin man?"     Gender: Posts: 746 Re: Writting « Reply #36 on: Nov 6th, 2002, 9:10pm » Quote Modify This is obviously not by me but I like it.   ~ The Cold Within ~     Six humans trapped by happenstance in black and bitter cold, each possessed a stick of wood, or so the story's told.   Their dying fire in need of logs, the first woman held hers back, for on the faces around the fire she noticed one was black.     The next man looking 'cross the way saw one not of his church, and couldn't bring himself to give the fire his stick of birch.   The third one sat in tattered clothes;   he gave his coat a hitch. Why should his log be put to use, to warm the idle rich?     The rich man just sat back and thought of the wealth he had in store, and how to keep what he had earned from the lazy, shiftless poor.     The black man's face bespoke revenge, as the fire passed from his sight, for all he saw in his stick of wood was a chance to spite the white.     And the last man of this forlorn group did naught except for gain: giving only to those who gave, was how he played the game.     The logs held tight in death's stilled hands,   were proof of human sin.   They didn't die from the cold without, they died from the cold within. -Author unknown IP Logged if the sun refused to shine I'd still be loving you. When mountains crumble to the sea there will still be you and me. one eyed jacks won I'd jax I'm makin' 1 eyed jaks. pbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbt. sunshinestar13 YaBB Junior Member look at the stars     Gender: Posts: 57 Re: Writting « Reply #37 on: Nov 6th, 2002, 11:32pm » Quote Modify i am also gonna include a poem not written by me.. because the way this author writes captures me like a dream that you have not quite woken from yet....   but as a side note i dont actually believe in self mulitalation.. but the writing is really good.. so please dont form a warped perception of me.. thank you     Cut-- by Sylvia Plath   What a thrill--- My thumb instead of an onion The top quite gone   Except for a sort of a hinge   Of skin,   A flap like a hat,   Dead white Then that red plush.   Little pilgrim,   The Indian's axed your scalp.   Your turkey wattle Carpet rolls.   Straight from the heart I step on it,   Clutching my bottle   Of pink fizz.   A celebration, this is.   Out of a gap A million soldiers run,   red coats, every one.   Whose side are they on? O my   Homuneulus, I am ill. I have taken a pill to kill.   The thin   Papery felling Saboteur, Kamikaze man---   the stain on your Gaze Ku Klux Klan darkens and tarnishes and when   The balled Pulp of your heart Confronts its smal Mill of silence   How you jump--- Trepanned veteran,   Dirty girl,   Thumb stump. IP Logged Sunshinestar Ashley YaBB God/goddess www.brianmay.co m     Gender: Posts: 3311 Re: Writting « Reply #38 on: Nov 7th, 2002, 2:54pm » Quote Modify lately i've been on such a creative streak, from like all these emotions... anyway i write this song yesterday, it all just came together, even the music which usually takes me a while.  Here's the lyrics (by the way you guys, all your stuff rocks!! keep posting it, i'll keep reading it) (and PS yes line 5 is a play off/ allusion to bohemian rhapsody...)   Hearts   So i guess that i should never say how i feel Because once again i did, and look where it got me Not exactly a lifetime in prison but still, you can't complain Because you're the one who's dealing out all of the pain.   So you think that you can just leave me here to cry Well that's not gonna happen cause you're not worth it I'm not gonna hold on for dear life and beg fo ryou to return Because i'm the one who's winning the hand this turn.   Deal me an ace, deal me a king It doesn't mean i'll be missing anything. Deal me a diamond, deal me a heart I'm missing you less and less the more we're apart.   So i guess that i'm allowed to move on now After all this waiting that didn't pay off Waiting for you to see what to do--now i can think for mnyself Because you're the one who made me Queen of Spades.   Deal me a jack, deal me a queen Maybe someday you'll understand what it means Deal me a club, deal me a spade I'm turning my back more and more every day   Deal me an end, deal me a lie Maybe you can stop and ask yourself why You'd deal me your heart and keep mine up your sleeve And hold it against me even after you leave.   So i guess taht i should never have wasted my time On someone like you who plays with emotions Back in the past, fun while it lasted, until i let you see That playing a game of hearts is not for me. (c) 2002 by Ashley Bowman IP Logged Love dares you to care for the people on the edge of the night and love dares us to change our way of caring about ourselves. This is our last dance. This is ourselves under pressure. NOXsucks30 YaBB God/goddess www.retroimg.co m   wicked awsome art     Gender: Posts: 4309 Re: Writting « Reply #39 on: Nov 7th, 2002, 6:15pm » Quote Modify scott~ i like the one you wrote the one about cutting was well writen, i liked it ash~wow that was totally awsome.. i loved it   ok now heres another of mine *side note* most of my poems are about the same person, hes been a big influence on the past year of my life, good and bad...   broken dreams   what are you doing? how can you treat me like this? you know how i feel about you and you just turn away   we've spent so much time together i thought my dreams would finally come true then you threw it in my face like you never even knew   now what am i sposed to do? you have someone to love,   but i'm just left in the dust just like the old days that were true   i thought i had left all that behind that maybe i found the one the one that i could love, and you'd feel the same way too   i guess its not ture oh well it looks like i'll have to move on even though i don't want to because im still in love with you IP Logged And what you've got means such a lot to me Someone to love, Somebody new. Someone to love, Someone like you. ~The Beatles wisensmart336 YaBB God/goddess "Do you know the muffin man?"     Gender: Posts: 746 Re: Writting « Reply #40 on: Nov 7th, 2002, 8:14pm » Quote Modify I saw someone today whom I haven't seen in a long time so alas inspiration struck me.   To wait for you is eternity   longing for you is a fratirnity your heart you say is for one You betrayed your heart and so I'm done Good luck to on your travels as the story of life unravels I thoroughly(sp)enjoy your company until next we meet the days seem less sunny   its not much, but its there IP Logged if the sun refused to shine I'd still be loving you. When mountains crumble to the sea there will still be you and me. one eyed jacks won I'd jax I'm makin' 1 eyed jaks. pbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbt. Ashley YaBB God/goddess www.brianmay.co m     Gender: Posts: 3311 Re: Writting « Reply #41 on: Nov 8th, 2002, 7:34pm » Quote Modify dude you guys rock, we should make a JS fans anthology lol IP Logged Love dares you to care for the people on the edge of the night and love dares us to change our way of caring about ourselves. This is our last dance. This is ourselves under pressure. RockChica02 YaBB God/goddess Actions are immoral, opinions are not.     Gender: Posts: 4144 Re: Writting « Reply #42 on: Nov 8th, 2002, 9:19pm » Quote Modify Hehe, not a bad idea. I might even try to write a little something for it. It probably wouldn't be very good though.... hmmm.... IP Logged "Of all the shooting stars I knew, I never fell for anyone but you..."- Ozma "One night I met you as the rain glistened in the shine of your eyes."- Melee .irony.is.for.suckers. RockChica02 YaBB God/goddess Actions are immoral, opinions are not.     Gender: Posts: 4144 Re: Writting « Reply #43 on: Nov 8th, 2002, 9:26pm » Quote Modify Okay, in my English class we had to write a little thing like a tribute to something important in your family, like your name. I wrote this poem about my biological father, since he gave me my last name. Not great, but it helped me get some emotions out! (Oh yeah, I hardly ever rhyme in my poems... don't ask me, I just don't do it.)   Once I was ashamed to write that name on a paper. W... h... i... t... something has to make it stop. Disconnected, disillusioned, I don't even know my own name. All it does is remind me of the love you ever gave, the time you never spent, the memories you never made, the life you left behind. I see hope in that name now, hope in my life and how great it is without you in it. A name that was once so empty   is full of broken hearts and unkept promises and all of my insecurities. Now I add my own promise, to never live up to this name, to make my own life and to never be like you... I'm going to stop hanging out with all my hang ups. A name is just a name, what you do with it makes it your own. IP Logged "Of all the shooting stars I knew, I never fell for anyone but you..."- Ozma "One night I met you as the rain glistened in the shine of your eyes."- Melee .irony.is.for.suckers. Ashley YaBB God/goddess www.brianmay.co m     Gender: Posts: 3311 Re: Writting « Reply #44 on: Nov 8th, 2002, 9:40pm » Quote Modify val you rock! that was awesome. IP Logged Love dares you to care for the people on the edge of the night and love dares us to change our way of caring about ourselves. This is our last dance. This is ourselves under pressure. 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