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Jupiter Sunrise Forum    Talk    Talk Amongst Yourselves    Writting « Previous topic | Next topic » Pages: 1 ... 7 8 9 10 11  ...  48 Reply Notify of replies Send Topic Print    Author  Topic: Writting  (Read 6371 times) sillyfairy YaBB God/goddess     Gender: Posts: 532 Re: Writting « Reply #120 on: Dec 11th, 2002, 7:43pm » Quote Modify Wow I really thought those last two poems were amazing.  I can identify with both. The first one about someone losing interest in you hehe that's happend to me. And the second about everyone judging you. I thought those were awsome, keep writing your poetry. IP Logged Ashley YaBB God/goddess www.brianmay.co m     Gender: Posts: 3311 Re: Writting « Reply #121 on: Dec 11th, 2002, 7:46pm » Quote Modify rock on to all! IP Logged Love dares you to care for the people on the edge of the night and love dares us to change our way of caring about ourselves. This is our last dance. This is ourselves under pressure. RockChica02 YaBB God/goddess Actions are immoral, opinions are not.     Gender: Posts: 4144 Re: Writting « Reply #122 on: Dec 12th, 2002, 9:23am » Quote Modify Ash started to write music to my "I Am" poem and it's so beautiful!!!!! I can't believe someone actually made a song out of my poems, I almost cried. It's so awesome and I am so in awe of Ash. Hehe.   And I want to thank everyone for the nice comments. They make me feel warm and fuzzy!!!! « Last Edit: Dec 12th, 2002, 9:23am by RockChica02 » IP Logged "Of all the shooting stars I knew, I never fell for anyone but you..."- Ozma "One night I met you as the rain glistened in the shine of your eyes."- Melee .irony.is.for.suckers. NOXsucks30 YaBB God/goddess www.retroimg.co m   wicked awsome art     Gender: Posts: 4309 Re: Writting « Reply #123 on: Dec 12th, 2002, 7:46pm » Quote Modify oh val, that first one TOTALLY explains what happened to me, except the fact that we are still best friends, but man some of these poems are so close its creepy... and "i am" is really good... make sure to tell ash I WANT TO HEAR IT TOO!!!!! hehehe IP Logged And what you've got means such a lot to me Someone to love, Somebody new. Someone to love, Someone like you. ~The Beatles Ashley YaBB God/goddess www.brianmay.co m     Gender: Posts: 3311 Re: Writting « Reply #124 on: Dec 12th, 2002, 8:13pm » Quote Modify don't worry, you'll hear it, it'll be on the album... hehe IP Logged Love dares you to care for the people on the edge of the night and love dares us to change our way of caring about ourselves. This is our last dance. This is ourselves under pressure. RockChica02 YaBB God/goddess Actions are immoral, opinions are not.     Gender: Posts: 4144 Re: Writting « Reply #125 on: Dec 12th, 2002, 8:17pm » Quote Modify Awwww man Ash, you're gonna make me cry again!!!!   But not a sad cry, a good cry!!   IP Logged "Of all the shooting stars I knew, I never fell for anyone but you..."- Ozma "One night I met you as the rain glistened in the shine of your eyes."- Melee .irony.is.for.suckers. Ashley YaBB God/goddess www.brianmay.co m     Gender: Posts: 3311 Re: Writting « Reply #126 on: Dec 16th, 2002, 11:00am » Quote Modify Release   respond take deep breaths right through your nose inhale the peace, flowing deep to lose the edge, to make you high relax pain needle puncture knuckles: white, line of sight to numb it all, lose yourself regret i'm lost, spinning room body gone, bright light on shining in my eyes, turn it off relief through my mouth now, pressure or pain i can't feel it now i don't know how consciousness fading farther away refresh inhale again, clean rubbery air four eyes gleaming lose their meaning glazed expression i'm gone repose fight back against the pressure, close the jaw metal in my mouth take it take it out white bloody piece of thread reserve over now don't breathe too deep oxygen there again, let me know when keep it in a wooden box relief get this off my face, let me leave i can't speak with all this blocking the leak white starch faded red rewind IP Logged Love dares you to care for the people on the edge of the night and love dares us to change our way of caring about ourselves. This is our last dance. This is ourselves under pressure. RockChica02 YaBB God/goddess Actions are immoral, opinions are not.     Gender: Posts: 4144 Re: Writting « Reply #127 on: Dec 16th, 2002, 11:44am » Quote Modify As always Ash, you have done another rockin' job! I really like that one... there's a lot going on in that piece and that makes it even better. IP Logged "Of all the shooting stars I knew, I never fell for anyone but you..."- Ozma "One night I met you as the rain glistened in the shine of your eyes."- Melee .irony.is.for.suckers. Mimi YaBB God/goddess im like a coozy cup, cool and fuzzy....     Gender: Posts: 1711 Re: Writting « Reply #128 on: Dec 16th, 2002, 12:03pm » Quote Modify how do u guys do it, Ive never been able to just put my thuoghts down on paper and have them sound good, The one that I posted is so cool (I think) and like I dont think I am going to be able to write again, My thoughts are so constipated in my brain its insane. (wow that rymed).     Keep writing ya'll I will keep reading and enjoying IP Logged *A warrior who wears two swords at his side, but does not put the spirit of combat into his heart, is nothing but a peasent or merchent wearing the skin of a warrior* Ashley YaBB God/goddess www.brianmay.co m     Gender: Posts: 3311 Re: Writting « Reply #129 on: Dec 16th, 2002, 5:17pm » Quote Modify (to the tune of Greensleeves) For all intents and purposes, i do my best to mourn thee But as it seems, life is a dream to those who've come before me In times like these a solemn breeze is all it takes to haunt me Still far away, you as the day proclaimed that you didn't want me.   Moonfall and an evening star are now the only brightness Leave me as  try to see how possibly i can fight this   When daylight's triumphs greet my eyes, i'll have already forgotten The scent of you on my clothes and shoes as a whisper of green in the cotton Now burgundy does not beckon me as sleeves of green and amber For none so true as the heart of you can boast such painful candor   Sunrise of another world is now my hope for sanity This one is on the run from you and your honest vanity. IP Logged Love dares you to care for the people on the edge of the night and love dares us to change our way of caring about ourselves. This is our last dance. This is ourselves under pressure. wisensmart336 YaBB God/goddess "Do you know the muffin man?"     Gender: Posts: 746 Re: Writting « Reply #130 on: Dec 16th, 2002, 6:25pm » Quote Modify ash those last two were really good, I liked them. well this next one is not a poem and well umm its well its not for everyone I guess.   She exited her home, and began down the street. Careful looking over her shoulder at every shadow, her eyes deceive. She is overcome with a feeling of saftey as she turns the corner, she lets down her guard assured that all is well as she walks down the final alleyway towards town. In the shadows a figure is behind her, careful not to make a noise it inches, following her closer. He draws his switchblade, she stops sudenly but for just a moment and continues.   He places a hand on her shoulder she whips out her balasong and spins as she grasps his wrist the blade in his other hand slashes her arm and kicks her legs out from underneath her. He lounges to the ground to stab her she kicks him in the groin and drives her blade into the top of his shoulder he withdraws and kicks the knife from her hand. She scrambles to her feet and begins to run for her life knowing that if she makes it out of the alley way she can be saved. with blood pouring from his shoulder he chases after her 20 yards till safety, but he is gaining on her quickly. she can hear his footsteps with only a few feet left she can feel his breath as he grabs her shoulder and turns her towards him he digs his knife into her midsection and drives her to the ground. He stands triuphant over her. turns and walks way.   He hears a noise from behind him and turns back to see his kill once again. but she is gone, disappered. It is with a look of bewilderment that he dies from bloodloss, not from his shoulder wound, no. but from her fangs digging into his neck and extracting his blood for her own pleasure. It is then that she jumps to the top of the apartment building to spend the night looking over the city till morning. IP Logged if the sun refused to shine I'd still be loving you. When mountains crumble to the sea there will still be you and me. one eyed jacks won I'd jax I'm makin' 1 eyed jaks. pbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbt. NOXsucks30 YaBB God/goddess www.retroimg.co m   wicked awsome art     Gender: Posts: 4309 Re: Writting « Reply #131 on: Dec 16th, 2002, 6:51pm » Quote Modify ok first ash, both of those were awsome, totally great, and i used to play greensleeves alllll the time when i used to play my clarinet (aka arthur nox ) second, scott that was wicked cool... i liked all the suspence and all ok this is a poem i wrote yesterday about my perfect chance with jakey   Perfect Chance   I couldnt do it again I had the perfect chance I just wanted to tell you How i feel inside   Why couldnt i say it?   Maybe ill get another shot I at least hope so If i dont get one Ill be so sad Oh why couldnt i say it?   Next time i swear will be it, If i dont take this chance I know ill regret it when i see you next         I'll let you hear it what i couldnt say to you today IP Logged And what you've got means such a lot to me Someone to love, Somebody new. Someone to love, Someone like you. ~The Beatles NOXsucks30 YaBB God/goddess www.retroimg.co m   wicked awsome art     Gender: Posts: 4309 Re: Writting « Reply #132 on: Dec 16th, 2002, 6:54pm » Quote Modify ok i was debating on putting this poem on the X-mas post, but i figured since it was writting id put it here   Christmas time again   its that time of year again so much to do, yet so little time all that hustle and bustle that is not for me   no one knows what to think about it the birth of christ, or just  a chance to be greedy that is not for me   all i want is to give   to see the look on my friends faces how happy i can make them with one simple gesture that is definitly me IP Logged And what you've got means such a lot to me Someone to love, Somebody new. Someone to love, Someone like you. ~The Beatles Ashley YaBB God/goddess www.brianmay.co m     Gender: Posts: 3311 Re: Writting « Reply #133 on: Dec 17th, 2002, 6:45pm » Quote Modify awesome, i liked those... scott your vampire thing (if i interpreted it right) reminds me of this story i wrote for a scholarship essay, it was about werewolves because i'm CONVINCED that there's werewolves in my woods at home.  It's a full moon tonight, i guess we'll see what happens... IP Logged Love dares you to care for the people on the edge of the night and love dares us to change our way of caring about ourselves. This is our last dance. This is ourselves under pressure. sillyfairy YaBB God/goddess     Gender: Posts: 532 Re: Writting « Reply #134 on: Dec 18th, 2002, 1:26am » Quote Modify NoX i really liked your poem "pefect chance" I could definatley identify with those feelings of wishing for a second chance or for the courage to say what you really feel. 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