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Jupiter Sunrise Forum    Talk    Talk Amongst Yourselves    Writting « Previous topic | Next topic » Pages: 1 ... 25 26 27 28 29  ...  48 Reply Notify of replies Send Topic Print    Author  Topic: Writting  (Read 6367 times) Claudette YaBB Newbie everyone is gone, home to oblivion     Gender: Posts: 22 Re: Writting « Reply #390 on: Aug 6th, 2003, 11:36am » Quote Modify In high school we had to write a poem about something we lost.  I cried because of how frustrated I got because English was not my best suite back then.  So I wrote and this is what came out.  It actually is one of the few writings I can show, so tell me what you all think.   ~Claudette   Made To Last     There is this place inside of me   It hides in the deepest recesses of my mind Constantly pounding on the walls of an open wound This place has no future; just fear A person made to last, but slowly dissolving into nothing It's searching for a way to just move on It's searching for a way to make it through the day The light breaks through and I feel empty Darkness comes in; I am alone Once I had nothing, but felt everything The space was filled with joy It was then that I belonged Yet, the hands keep turning and I stand still Nothing has changed but everything around me I lay awake, staring at life,   Wondering where it was while I was breathing I look back at the mirror and see no reflection I find no trace of something made to last.   IP Logged It starts stopping when it stop stopping- Ben Kweller Mimi YaBB God/goddess im like a coozy cup, cool and fuzzy....     Gender: Posts: 1711 Re: Writting « Reply #391 on: Aug 8th, 2003, 10:46am » Quote Modify I havent posted here for a while, but here goes..   three weeks to live three weeks to die yes I will cry b/c for sure my grandma is going to die     She has lived so very long I have seen her be so strong I will miss her when she is gone Im glad we have been friends all along     IP Logged *A warrior who wears two swords at his side, but does not put the spirit of combat into his heart, is nothing but a peasent or merchent wearing the skin of a warrior* Ashley YaBB God/goddess www.brianmay.co m     Gender: Posts: 3311 Re: Writting « Reply #392 on: Aug 8th, 2003, 3:12pm » Quote Modify the last 2 rocked... Claudette i liked the line "Nothing has changed but everything around me", i so totally feel that sometimes.  And Mimi, you're my hero-- just like your grandma's been strong i know you can be too.   i'm in the process of putting a song together inspired by The Crow... i'll put it up when it's finished. IP Logged Love dares you to care for the people on the edge of the night and love dares us to change our way of caring about ourselves. This is our last dance. This is ourselves under pressure. MonkeySleepy YaBB God/goddess Fighterdoken!     Gender: Posts: 756 Re: Writting « Reply #393 on: Aug 9th, 2003, 5:10pm » Quote Modify The Summer is No Time for Idle Moods     Do you ever wake to realize that the person in the mirror is not you? That the feelings you have and the emotions in you are not part of who you thought you are? That your moods change with the wind, on the back of dice throw by the idle hands of fate? That you shadow is perhaps a bit darker than you know? That something in your eyes is something in someone elses? That you are torn, deeply, madly, truly and just maybe one side may not live to the sun rise? And that which strikes in you a fear so deep it has no end is that of the fact that part of you wants something to die, something born. And you don't know what from which. Savior/ Destroyer a line only seen by those saved and those perishing in a moment of indecision. And in that moment have you ever seen a forrest for a single tree, a man in crowd? In that single moment you know what you have to choose. And like a sunset you get ready to lay down your life just to see the stars one more time. Have you ever once wondered?  So when you see this man before you, pulled in a moment of crossroads, maybe then you will see that traveling a path to it's logical end is not the choice for those who truly love. IP Logged Last man standing. Ashley YaBB God/goddess www.brianmay.co m     Gender: Posts: 3311 Re: Writting « Reply #394 on: Aug 9th, 2003, 6:01pm » Quote Modify Nevermore   It's passing and it's passed the seconds stretched to hours, the hours to a year Now you see me, now you don't But will you ever again? I behold the fear So unfamiliar to me but so trivial Compared to my own anguish and despair At having to wreak a bloody havoc All in your name, and know that you're still not there. Maybe it can't rain all the time Maybe your heart aches with mine Mayeb someday i'll see what it's all for When this bird on my shoulder will cry nevermore. I'm falling through the glass all over again and seeing your face now i see you, now i don't only tarnished rings and tattered lace So familiar to me as they know who i am But it isn't me this mask can't hide the pain of what i'll never see But maybe it can't rain all the time maybe you're out there not just in my mind maybe someday i'll see you once more when the bird that is my hindsight cries nevermore This death isn't silent... it's the string on a guitar that no one else can hear from this far atop a roof where my only guide is the midnight raven at my side IP Logged Love dares you to care for the people on the edge of the night and love dares us to change our way of caring about ourselves. This is our last dance. This is ourselves under pressure. NOXsucks30 YaBB God/goddess www.retroimg.co m   wicked awsome art     Gender: Posts: 4309 Re: Writting « Reply #395 on: Aug 9th, 2003, 6:09pm » Quote Modify 1. claudette, that was really good i liked it   2. dave, i love it, just like all your writting, usually something i can connect with   3. ash thats awsome... the crow? .... er a...der...chibbitybah...im buying you a pizza hehe   4. i should write more, but alas, my art takes over me sometimes, perhaps i shall later IP Logged And what you've got means such a lot to me Someone to love, Somebody new. Someone to love, Someone like you. ~The Beatles MonkeySleepy YaBB God/goddess Fighterdoken!     Gender: Posts: 756 Re: Writting « Reply #396 on: Aug 11th, 2003, 4:42pm » Quote Modify I wrote my own version of Radiohead's There There from the hail to the thief album   In pitch dark I go walking in Your garden Broken branches trip me as I speak   Just because you feel it doesn't mean it's there just because you feel it doesn't mean it's there   And I'm always your Siren Singing you to Shipwreck Steer away from my shore We'd sink so much faster   just because  you want love doesn't mean it's there Just because you want love doesn't mean you care   there there   Why so blue and lonely? Heaven sent me to you   We are all accidents Waiting Waiting to happen We are all accidents Waiting Waiting to happen   Waiting IP Logged Last man standing. NOXsucks30 YaBB God/goddess www.retroimg.co m   wicked awsome art     Gender: Posts: 4309 Re: Writting « Reply #397 on: Aug 11th, 2003, 5:42pm » Quote Modify to let you all know, its really cool singing dave's version with the song hehehe IP Logged And what you've got means such a lot to me Someone to love, Somebody new. Someone to love, Someone like you. ~The Beatles Claudette YaBB Newbie everyone is gone, home to oblivion     Gender: Posts: 22 Re: Writting « Reply #398 on: Aug 12th, 2003, 4:37am » Quote Modify Dave and Ashley!!  Great stuff guys!!  I really liked your piece Dave and your song of the crow took me through a flash of the movie.  Truly great stuff! IP Logged It starts stopping when it stop stopping- Ben Kweller Ashley YaBB God/goddess www.brianmay.co m     Gender: Posts: 3311 Re: Writting « Reply #399 on: Aug 13th, 2003, 8:48pm » Quote Modify I Was, I Am, I Will Be   I can feel the hours passing by and i can feel my mortal body slowly start to wither and die mine was made to last but i gave it up for you everything i was, i gave it all to you so now i won't be able to walk this earth for half as long as i might have once before but you'll be there to walk with me and that's worth dying for i can feel the time go away as i feel the weight of what i took on in each passing day i was built to have more but i gave them all to you everything i am, i gave it all to you so now i won't be able to see everything i might have anticipated but you'll be able to see with me everything that is fated i can feel the days push aside and i can see the hollow eyes that stare deep inside they were meant to last thousands of years but i gave those years to you everything i'll be, i gave it all to you so now i won't be able to pass the days and know that trillions more will return without a doubt but you'll be able to live the few with me that i have left to live out   « Last Edit: Aug 13th, 2003, 8:48pm by Ashley » IP Logged Love dares you to care for the people on the edge of the night and love dares us to change our way of caring about ourselves. This is our last dance. This is ourselves under pressure. sillyfairy YaBB God/goddess     Gender: Posts: 532 Re: Writting « Reply #400 on: Aug 13th, 2003, 9:16pm » Quote Modify I really liked your poem ash IP Logged MonkeySleepy YaBB God/goddess Fighterdoken!     Gender: Posts: 756 Re: Writting « Reply #401 on: Aug 24th, 2003, 6:03pm » Quote Modify "The World is Grey but I can see the Colour of your Smile"     One cannot slumber in the chambers of guarded thoughts for too long, lest he forget how to leave them and be forever trapped in the couches of isolation, hidden behind velvet curtains of self deceit. Seperate, we are but tears in the ocean, but together we shall ride the white capped waves to tear down the walls of our private palaces and again allow the sunny glow of companionship passage into our enclosed estates. So let us throw open our gates! Let glad tidings ring throughout the world, as we bask in each other's warm friendship. The World was frozen till it saw you smile.   « Last Edit: Aug 25th, 2003, 5:43am by MonkeySleepy » IP Logged Last man standing. NOXsucks30 YaBB God/goddess www.retroimg.co m   wicked awsome art     Gender: Posts: 4309 Re: Writting « Reply #402 on: Aug 24th, 2003, 6:23pm » Quote Modify beautiful dave.. IP Logged And what you've got means such a lot to me Someone to love, Somebody new. Someone to love, Someone like you. ~The Beatles Ashley YaBB God/goddess www.brianmay.co m     Gender: Posts: 3311 Re: Writting « Reply #403 on: Aug 24th, 2003, 6:41pm » Quote Modify Lonely   Everyone's asleep but you and me You're awake out there somewhere that's too far away to see the days seem so much longer after you've gone and now there's this world that i have to take on with mine and everyone else's problems, mine and everyone else's lives i can't tackle it all alone, you're what makes me thrive   "so don't fall away and leave me to myself..." IP Logged Love dares you to care for the people on the edge of the night and love dares us to change our way of caring about ourselves. This is our last dance. This is ourselves under pressure. NOXsucks30 YaBB God/goddess www.retroimg.co m   wicked awsome art     Gender: Posts: 4309 Re: Writting « Reply #404 on: Aug 25th, 2003, 3:38pm » Quote Modify wow ash... ..that was AMAZING! imean, er yoiu... a.. chibbity bah... im buying you a pizza   IP Logged And what you've got means such a lot to me Someone to love, Somebody new. Someone to love, Someone like you. ~The Beatles Pages: 1 ... 25 26 27 28 29  ...  48 Reply Notify of replies Send Topic Print Forum Jump: ----------------------------- General -----------------------------  - New Forum Warning! ----------------------------- Talk -----------------------------=> Talk Amongst Yourselves   - Questions for the Band   - Street Team Business « Previous topic | Next topic »

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