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Re: Writting
« Reply #390 on: Aug 6th, 2003, 11:36am »
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In high school we had to write a poem about something we lost.  I cried because of how frustrated I got because English was not my best suite back then.  So I wrote and this is what came out.  It actually is one of the few writings I can show, so tell me what you all think.
 
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Made To Last
 
 
There is this place inside of me  
It hides in the deepest recesses of my mind
Constantly pounding on the walls of an open wound
This place has no future; just fear
A person made to last, but slowly dissolving into nothing
It's searching for a way to just move on
It's searching for a way to make it through the day
The light breaks through and I feel empty
Darkness comes in; I am alone
Once I had nothing, but felt everything
The space was filled with joy
It was then that I belonged
Yet, the hands keep turning and I stand still
Nothing has changed but everything around me
I lay awake, staring at life,  
Wondering where it was while I was breathing
I look back at the mirror and see no reflection
I find no trace of something made to last.
 
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Re: Writting
« Reply #391 on: Aug 8th, 2003, 10:46am »
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I havent posted here for a while, but here goes..
 
three weeks to live
three weeks to die
yes I will cry
b/c for sure my grandma is going to die  
 
She has lived so very long
I have seen her be so strong
I will miss her when she is gone
Im glad we have been friends all along  
 Cry
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« Reply #392 on: Aug 8th, 2003, 3:12pm »
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the last 2 rocked... Claudette i liked the line "Nothing has changed but everything around me", i so totally feel that sometimes.  And Mimi, you're my hero-- just like your grandma's been strong i know you can be too.
 
i'm in the process of putting a song together inspired by The Crow... i'll put it up when it's finished.
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Re: Writting
« Reply #393 on: Aug 9th, 2003, 5:10pm »
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The Summer is No Time for Idle Moods
 
 
Do you ever wake to realize that the person in the mirror is not you? That the feelings you have and the emotions in you are not part of who you thought you are? That your moods change with the wind, on the back of dice throw by the idle hands of fate? That you shadow is perhaps a bit darker than you know? That something in your eyes is something in someone elses? That you are torn, deeply, madly, truly and just maybe one side may not live to the sun rise? And that which strikes in you a fear so deep it has no end is that of the fact that part of you wants something to die, something born. And you don't know what from which. Savior/ Destroyer a line only seen by those saved and those perishing in a moment of indecision. And in that moment have you ever seen a forrest for a single tree, a man in crowd? In that single moment you know what you have to choose. And like a sunset you get ready to lay down your life just to see the stars one more time. Have you ever once wondered?  So when you see this man before you, pulled in a moment of crossroads, maybe then you will see that traveling a path to it's logical end is not the choice for those who truly love.
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« Reply #394 on: Aug 9th, 2003, 6:01pm »
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Nevermore
 
It's passing and it's passed
the seconds stretched to hours, the hours to a year
Now you see me, now you don't
But will you ever again? I behold the fear
So unfamiliar to me but so trivial
Compared to my own anguish and despair
At having to wreak a bloody havoc
All in your name, and know that you're still not there.
Maybe it can't rain all the time
Maybe your heart aches with mine
Mayeb someday i'll see what it's all for
When this bird on my shoulder will cry nevermore.
I'm falling through the glass
all over again and seeing your face
now i see you, now i don't
only tarnished rings and tattered lace
So familiar to me as they know who i am
But it isn't me
this mask can't hide the pain
of what i'll never see
But maybe it can't rain all the time
maybe you're out there not just in my mind
maybe someday i'll see you once more
when the bird that is my hindsight cries nevermore
This death isn't silent... it's the string on a guitar
that no one else can hear from this far
atop a roof where my only guide
is the midnight raven at my side
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Re: Writting
« Reply #395 on: Aug 9th, 2003, 6:09pm »
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1. claudette, that was really good i liked it
 
2. dave, i love it, just like all your writting, usually something i can connect with
 
3. ash thats awsome... the crow? .... er a...der...chibbitybah...im buying you a pizza Wink hehe
 
4. i should write more, but alas, my art takes over me sometimes, perhaps i shall later Cheesy
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Re: Writting
« Reply #396 on: Aug 11th, 2003, 4:42pm »
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I wrote my own version of Radiohead's There There from the hail to the thief album
 
In pitch dark
I go walking in
Your garden
Broken branches
trip me as I speak
 
Just because you feel it
doesn't mean it's there
just because you feel it
doesn't mean it's there
 
And I'm always your Siren
Singing you to Shipwreck
Steer away from my shore
We'd sink so much faster
 
just because  you want love
doesn't mean it's there
Just because you want love
doesn't mean you care
 
there there
 
Why so blue and lonely?
Heaven sent me to you
 
We are all accidents
Waiting
Waiting to happen
We are all accidents
Waiting
Waiting to happen
 
Waiting
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Re: Writting
« Reply #397 on: Aug 11th, 2003, 5:42pm »
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to let you all know, its really cool singing dave's version with the song Smiley hehehe
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Re: Writting
« Reply #398 on: Aug 12th, 2003, 4:37am »
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Dave and Ashley!!  Great stuff guys!!  I really liked your piece Dave and your song of the crow took me through a flash of the movie.  Truly great stuff!
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« Reply #399 on: Aug 13th, 2003, 8:48pm »
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I Was, I Am, I Will Be
 
I can feel the hours passing by
and i can feel my mortal body slowly start to wither and die
mine was made to last but i gave it up for you
everything i was, i gave it all to you
so now i won't be able to walk this earth
for half as long as i might have once before
but you'll be there to walk with me
and that's worth dying for
i can feel the time go away
as i feel the weight of what i took on in each passing day
i was built to have more but i gave them all to you
everything i am, i gave it all to you
so now i won't be able to see
everything i might have anticipated
but you'll be able to see with me
everything that is fated
i can feel the days push aside
and i can see the hollow eyes that stare deep inside
they were meant to last thousands of years but i gave those years to you
everything i'll be, i gave it all to you
so now i won't be able to pass the days
and know that trillions more will return without a doubt
but you'll be able to live the few with me
that i have left to live out
 
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Re: Writting
« Reply #400 on: Aug 13th, 2003, 9:16pm »
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I really liked your poem ash
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Re: Writting
« Reply #401 on: Aug 24th, 2003, 6:03pm »
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"The World is Grey but I can see the Colour of your Smile"
 
 
One cannot slumber in the chambers of guarded thoughts for too long, lest he forget how to leave them and be forever trapped in the couches of isolation, hidden behind velvet curtains of self deceit. Seperate, we are but tears in the ocean, but together we shall ride the white capped waves to tear down the walls of our private palaces and again allow the sunny glow of companionship passage into our enclosed estates. So let us throw open our gates! Let glad tidings ring throughout the world, as we bask in each other's warm friendship. The World was frozen till it saw you smile.
 
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Re: Writting
« Reply #402 on: Aug 24th, 2003, 6:23pm »
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beautiful dave.. Smiley
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Re: Writting
« Reply #403 on: Aug 24th, 2003, 6:41pm »
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Lonely
 
Everyone's asleep but you and me
You're awake out there somewhere that's too far away to see
the days seem so much longer after you've gone
and now there's this world that i have to take on
with mine and everyone else's problems, mine and everyone else's lives
i can't tackle it all alone, you're what makes me thrive
 
"so don't fall away and leave me to myself..."
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Re: Writting
« Reply #404 on: Aug 25th, 2003, 3:38pm »
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wow ash... ..that was AMAZING! imean, er yoiu... a.. chibbity bah... im buying you a pizza
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