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Re: Writting
« Reply #75 on: Nov 22nd, 2002, 1:05am »
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A little poem for y'all
 
 
I just wanna cry
He left me without a goodbye
Like our time was nothing
I thought I had found something
I was wrong
I came on too strong
I gave too much
And he didnt give enough
I let him slip away
but I played it brave
I stayed and felt the pain
And relived the memories in my brain.
Why did he leave?
Wasn't I enough?
Don't I deserve to be loved?
I just wanna cry
And subdue all the feelings I have inside.
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« Reply #76 on: Nov 22nd, 2002, 12:27pm »
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awesome!!
here's one of my own...
 
To a Dying Hard Drive
 
You brought me such joy
More than once in a while
But now all my memories are being destroyed
And now i have lost all my memorable files.
We had such good times
Before that fateful day
And now i've lost my stories and rhymes
And compositions are deteriorating away.
Oh, what can i do
Without you always here
I was connected to the world when i had you
Now AIM, my link, has disappeared
No other new drive
Can replace what we had
You used to make me feel so alive
But with your breakdown i'm now so very sad
So goodbye, my friend
Take with you my files
Our true friendship i know will never end
And upon thinking of you i will always smile.
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« Reply #77 on: Nov 22nd, 2002, 12:58pm »
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Angelica,
Message reached
Us swiftly, like
A fire consuming
The miles of
Parched creation and
Reaching heavenward
For an answer.
Stripped of all senses,
We realize everything, but understand nothing.
Salted eyes scan the horizon: "What do we hope for?"
Time rides on Angel's wings; we follow behind,
Plodding heavily, shoulders bent, through grief's desert--
This world was too barren for your luminous spirit to thrive
Your soul sought sanctity, yet found no temporal respite.
(aphienai to pnevma)
The flame shuddered
At passing breath,  
Was snuffed out,  
And left only the
Memory of its light.
And you, Angelica?
Have you taken it
With you?  What
Are we left with?
A cherubimic hymn?
A wooden image,  
Haloed in gold?
A jeweled chalice,
A holy mystery?
Yes, and this hope:
Our eternal reunion.

 
 
Line 16 was originally written in Greek, but I don't have a Greek font on this computer.
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« Reply #78 on: Nov 22nd, 2002, 4:36pm »
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wow those last 3 were really really good
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« Reply #79 on: Nov 22nd, 2002, 5:28pm »
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i definitly have to agree with mr. wiggl... i mean scott  Wink
those poems were awsome, the first two like completly described how i felt about 3mths ago...very depressing time..... but yeah anyway... those were great, im not that great at writing even though i still try....
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« Reply #80 on: Nov 23rd, 2002, 12:17pm »
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Keep em coming guys, one of these days i'm gonna print out this whole thread.  yay!
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« Reply #81 on: Nov 23rd, 2002, 12:25pm »
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This one is by my hero E A Robinson, who i'm sure would be my soulmate if we lived at the same time. I've read this one so many times it's committed to memory for good... my favorite poem in the world:
 
The Unforgiven
 
When he, who is the unforgiven,
Beheld her first, he found her fair.
No promise ever dreamt in Heaven
Could then have lured him anywhere
That would have been away from there;
And all his wits had lightly striven,
Foiled with her voice, and eyes, and hair.
 
There's nothing in the saints and sages
To meet the shafts her glances had,
Or such as hers have had for ages
To blind a man till he be glad,
Or humble him till he be mad;
The story would have many pages
And would be neither good nor bad.
 
And having followed, you would find him
Where properly the play begins
But look for no red light behind him,
No fumes of many-colored sins
Fanned high by screaming violins--
God knows what good it was to blind him,  
And whether man or woman wins.
 
And by the same eternal token,
Who knows just how it all will end?
This drama of hard words unspoken,
This fireside farce, without a friend
Or enemy to comprehend
What augurs when two lives are broken
And fear finds nothing left to mend.
 
He stares in vain for what awaits him
And sees in Love a coin to toss
He smiles, and her cold hush berates him
Beneath his hard half of the cross.
They wonder why it ever was;
And she, the Unforgiving, hates him
More for her lack than for her loss.
 
He feeds with pride his indecision
And shrinks from what will not occur
Bequeathing with infirm derision
His ashes to the days that were
Before she made him prisoner;
And labors to retrieve the vision
That he must once have had of her.
 
He waits, and there awaits an ending,
But he knows neither what nor when
And no magicians are attending
To make him see as he saw then
And he will never find again
The face that once had been the rending
Of all his purpose among men.
 
He blames her not, nor does he chide her
And she has nothing new to say
If he were Bluebeard, he could hide her
But that's not written in the play.
And there will be no change today
ALthough, to the serene outsider,  
There still would seem to be a way.
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« Reply #82 on: Nov 23rd, 2002, 7:06pm »
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i liked that  Smiley
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« Reply #83 on: Nov 24th, 2002, 12:58am »
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wow ash that was really good! I think it could be a good song.
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« Reply #84 on: Nov 24th, 2002, 10:27am »
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I am such a dork. I was so distracted when I posted that poem that I forgot what I had originally wanted to say about it:
 
Hey Scott--
This is that poem I was telling you about...the one I wrote after I found out that my friend Angelica was killed in a car accident. I don't normally like people to see my poetry, but since we were talking about it I decided to go ahead and put it up here.
Hmm...perhaps I should also tell you what the Greek means, as the second half of the poem doesn't make much sense without it. OK, so roughly translated it means a passing of breath or spirit. The Greeks believed that a person's breath and spirit are intermingled - inseperable, in a sense - so their word pnevma means both breath and spirit. So the imagery there is an analogy between a breath blowing out a candle and the passing of Angelica's spirit taking away her earthly light/life. So basically I wasn't trying to throw some Greek in there just to be pretentious; it was just the only way that I could really make that analogy.
 
And now that I've typed all that out, I'm realizing that I probably should've just sent you a private message. Whatever. I'm too lazy to retype everything.
Sorry, everyone, for wasting your time! Undecided
 
P.S. Ash, I love E. A. Robinson!  Good call!   Smiley
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« Reply #85 on: Nov 24th, 2002, 2:23pm »
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Thank you.
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« Reply #86 on: Nov 24th, 2002, 5:23pm »
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ahhh Robinson is the best, he's my favorite poet ever, it's so cool that someone else likes him on here!  here's another one of his that i memorized...
 
The Dark Hills
 
Dark hills at evening in the west
Where sunset hovers like a sound
Of golden horns that sang to rest
Old bones of warriors underground
Far now from all the banner'd ways
Where flash the legions of the sun
You fade--as if the last of days
Were fading, and all wars were done.
 
my favorite one by him is like 14 pages long so i'll spare you all... go visit my tribute site of him at http://www.geocities.com/ashleythrockstar2002/robinson.html Smiley
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« Reply #87 on: Nov 24th, 2002, 5:38pm »
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      Great Oak Tree
 
I sit under the great oak tree
The branches stretch to cover me
I look above at the great green leaves
The lights fights through the gaps
 
The branches stretch in every direction
The curves of each may seem like perfection
To others though some seem dangerously short
While the longer thicker ones show more support
 
To the top, it will take some time
Choose each branch and begin to climb
Foregin things hang in the tree
A birds nest, a foot ball and friseby
 
When the top you reach all the leaves have gone
The winter cold won't be long
The ground will be covered with powdered snow
Away from the great oak we must go
 
Its branches are stripped and bare
We can no longer stay here.
Under the beautiful great oak tree
Under the beautiful great oak tree.
 
 
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Re: Writting
« Reply #88 on: Nov 28th, 2002, 8:38pm »
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i havnt written very much latley at all.... dunno why... maybe because im not happy, and im not sad, im kinda just.. blah...i dont know... its weird...... maybe i will get some inspiration soon
oh and i saw that its definitly written... so im guessing that writting is spelled write too.......lol ....yeah im a freak lol  Grin
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« Reply #89 on: Nov 29th, 2002, 12:37pm »
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powder from the night,
all is absent in the light
The cold over comes  
I surrender to it.
sink into it, embrace it
deep and lost into the nothingness  
I feel empty and lost.
To feel right, but at what cost
to lose it all  
don't want to fall
like the powder from the sky
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if the sun refused to shine I'd still be loving you.
When mountains crumble to the sea there will still be you and me.
one eyed jacks won I'd jax I'm makin' 1 eyed jaks.
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